I love the flow of this though there's a couple early sentences where the beginning and end repeat themselves that kind of makes it awkward, which is sad since you really get into a good groove and from then on it's perfect. Sweden is phenomenal here, the right amount of self-assurance, hot mess, and knowledge that Norway does what Norway wants and Sweden is just stuck coming along for the ride. Norway too is fantastic, especially the end, because you don't know what's going on in his mind so everything can go a thousand ways.
The way they speak to each other, when they speak, is fantastic. The end really captures it best because for them, there are rarely words that express what they're thinking. It's all small actions, like fingers over the ink or a pause that's a split second too long. Yet there's an ease to the story's progression (even if there isn't to their relationship) so that it all seems natural like a sigh, as if this was clearly how it was meant to be: nothing forced, just Sweden and Norway being Sweden and Norway.
Also, nice use of the Verne; knew I'd seen that somewhere. You captured the French language in describing Norway's voice, and even the man's comment at the beginning about knowing French or how both nations understand it. Languages in Hetalia fics make me happy. :)
All in all, perfect score from me, though SuNor and French are my weaknesses so maybe I'm a bit biased. ;D
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Date: 2012-08-02 04:19 am (UTC)I love the flow of this though there's a couple early sentences where the beginning and end repeat themselves that kind of makes it awkward, which is sad since you really get into a good groove and from then on it's perfect. Sweden is phenomenal here, the right amount of self-assurance, hot mess, and knowledge that Norway does what Norway wants and Sweden is just stuck coming along for the ride. Norway too is fantastic, especially the end, because you don't know what's going on in his mind so everything can go a thousand ways.
The way they speak to each other, when they speak, is fantastic. The end really captures it best because for them, there are rarely words that express what they're thinking. It's all small actions, like fingers over the ink or a pause that's a split second too long. Yet there's an ease to the story's progression (even if there isn't to their relationship) so that it all seems natural like a sigh, as if this was clearly how it was meant to be: nothing forced, just Sweden and Norway being Sweden and Norway.
Also, nice use of the Verne; knew I'd seen that somewhere. You captured the French language in describing Norway's voice, and even the man's comment at the beginning about knowing French or how both nations understand it. Languages in Hetalia fics make me happy. :)
All in all, perfect score from me, though SuNor and French are my weaknesses so maybe I'm a bit biased. ;D